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Friday, March 30, 2007

The Dying Mans Song

Coming days are Undergoing Change
The Feeling for living is completely gone
an extrovert has become an introvert
this is a dying mans song

His dreams now crippled
walking through the walk of life
as fellow men flew by him
that feeling cut him like a knife

The system had let him down
taking him in a direction he dint want to go
the other paths had been shut now
for the system dint want him to walk alone

Already mentally dead,Walking the path
awaiting death not too slowly
thinking about his life he died
for his dreams had'nt become reality

12 Comments:

Blogger sharanya said...

why has it been posted twice? anyway.. it's to the point. though some thing is missing.

7:20 AM  
Blogger sharanya said...

and it's good that you haven't tried to rhyme like the others... (ie if the others were done deliberately)

7:21 AM  
Blogger Zombie C said...

oooooooh

7:26 AM  
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12:13 AM  
Blogger CK said...

Hey i read the 'The Dying Mans Song' and 'Alone'..dei..tats sme seriously good stuff da...u've got a nice hang of this tapass..make sure u keep working on it..
and liek sharanya has said rhyme panna try pannathey...

9:54 PM  
Blogger ShifterChrome said...

dude.. sweet.. can actually feel it.. kinda connect to it too.."dying man's song". anyway.. agree with sharanya.. unwanted rhyming makes it look ameture.. anyway.. cool stuff da..

9:15 PM  
Blogger msr said...

the feelings tried to convey are too mixed up...d right direction stickin 2 one feeling would make it more the surreal sort of xperience ...sumthin dat ur aimin at...at d moment it sounds like d guy nxt door...to smitten n choked!

6:43 AM  
Blogger Dolphin said...

swan song eh>?? cool ! :)

8:03 AM  
Blogger Arka Das said...

woo-haha

1:53 PM  
Blogger Fantasized emotions appearing real said...

did u write it for meee??? its jus a she here!!

2:55 AM  
Blogger Shouvik.gr said...

so you a poet these days...??? Engg getting to you...

10:25 AM  
Blogger Annapurna said...

nice one...the poetry resonates with a chord in every one of us...sigh a requiem for a dream.. :-)

11:09 PM  

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