The Dying Mans Song
Coming days are Undergoing Change
The Feeling for living is completely gone
an extrovert has become an introvert
this is a dying mans song
His dreams now crippled
walking through the walk of life
as fellow men flew by him
that feeling cut him like a knife
The system had let him down
taking him in a direction he dint want to go
the other paths had been shut now
for the system dint want him to walk alone
Already mentally dead,Walking the path
awaiting death not too slowly
thinking about his life he died
for his dreams had'nt become reality
12 Comments:
why has it been posted twice? anyway.. it's to the point. though some thing is missing.
and it's good that you haven't tried to rhyme like the others... (ie if the others were done deliberately)
oooooooh
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Hey i read the 'The Dying Mans Song' and 'Alone'..dei..tats sme seriously good stuff da...u've got a nice hang of this tapass..make sure u keep working on it..
and liek sharanya has said rhyme panna try pannathey...
dude.. sweet.. can actually feel it.. kinda connect to it too.."dying man's song". anyway.. agree with sharanya.. unwanted rhyming makes it look ameture.. anyway.. cool stuff da..
the feelings tried to convey are too mixed up...d right direction stickin 2 one feeling would make it more the surreal sort of xperience ...sumthin dat ur aimin at...at d moment it sounds like d guy nxt door...to smitten n choked!
swan song eh>?? cool ! :)
woo-haha
did u write it for meee??? its jus a she here!!
so you a poet these days...??? Engg getting to you...
nice one...the poetry resonates with a chord in every one of us...sigh a requiem for a dream.. :-)
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